Once upon a time there were two chocolate bars. The other one was a big muscular protein bar and the other was really cute healthy fitness bar. They were both hanging out in the local gym in the candy shelf.
Out of the blue the protein bar came and talked to the cute fitness bar. It was love in first sight! From that moment on they were inseparable. Year passed and their love stayed strong until one unlucky day two lovers came and bought them both. Their paths diverged.
Just before their life would have ended the lovers decided to stop eating sweets cold turkey. So they threw both of the chocolate bars in to the trash can and so on they were together again. all tho in crappy surroundings the still loved each other and lived their life happily ever after.
The End
Muse away! 
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March 14, 2012 at 3:59 pm
Ms Leino
Contents: Excellent
The idioms are superb and your vocabulary advanced. I like the way you use words and expressions that we have learned during this course – it shows maturity and intelligence. Even though your two characters are merely chocolate bars, they make a funny little story with delightful description. I laughed out loud when I read the first paragraph. I think you could have written something more serious too, but this is original! 🙂 What a witty title!
Grammar: Very Good
– ON the candy shelf
– love AT first sight
– from that moment ON
– yearS passed
– and SO they were together again
– ALTHOUGH
Pay attention to punctuation, there is always a comma after an indication of time or place (out of the blue COMMA) + (from that moment COMMA)
March 15, 2012 at 10:26 am
ilmarieravuori
Nice story Wille I like your story bacause it wasn’t too long and easy to read